This is a good start. I think you need something to seperate the flashback and the other film, but I like the idea. The interview is good and filmed well although I don't like the zoom either.
I think its a good idea and i can see what your trying to do. I agree the running is a bit long and i think not all your cuts are exact. Is the title going on the tree? What about the other credits? I can't see an obvious place for them to go.
Good so far, agree about needing effect on flashback but like the cutting between them and the running. I think the speed of running is ok, we get the idea.
Well done, I think you've made a really good start! Some of the running cuts might be tighter but apart from that I think you've got it all under control. Good luck!
To me its better if you start with the running but we don't know why and then she stops and does the circling thing and we see what happened or maybe you can cross cut with the police scdene to create more tension, but it's good. The running has some comtinuity that needs looking at.
It's good. The 360 degree shot was too long and felt a bit odd. Liked the running. The police bit is good. Except the zoom in on the face. Great job.
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ReplyDeleteThis is a good start. I think you need something to seperate the flashback and the other film, but I like the idea. The interview is good and filmed well although I don't like the zoom either.
ReplyDeleteErin
I think its a good idea and i can see what your trying to do. I agree the running is a bit long and i think not all your cuts are exact. Is the title going on the tree? What about the other credits? I can't see an obvious place for them to go.
ReplyDeleteI like it so far and I thinki adding music will make a big difference.
ReplyDeleteSteph
Great idea! Agree about zoom and 360, but othherwise its good and i like the interview scene. John
ReplyDeleteLots of good editing so well done for that. Agree about making flashbacks different maybe and effect or colour?
ReplyDeleteHollie
I think things are going well and I'm sure it will be a good piece at the end. Have you thought about your titles and credits?
ReplyDeleteSarah
I like this, the girl acts quite well although i would run faster if someone wanted to kill me! I think she has killed him though?
ReplyDeleteharry
If you havent thought about your credits maybe break up the 360 shot with them? Seems a good place. Like the police bit, well filmed.
ReplyDeleteRobert
Good so far, agree about needing effect on flashback but like the cutting between them and the running. I think the speed of running is ok, we get the idea.
ReplyDeleteJonas
Well done, I think you've made a really good start! Some of the running cuts might be tighter but apart from that I think you've got it all under control. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteRachel
She stabbed him, right? Good.
ReplyDeletemikey
To me its better if you start with the running but we don't know why and then she stops and does the circling thing and we see what happened or maybe you can cross cut with the police scdene to create more tension, but it's good. The running has some comtinuity that needs looking at.
ReplyDeletei agree with Gemma, we both said it but just wanted to wish you luck! Caitlin
ReplyDeleteI don't agree with cait and gem, i like your order! but i think there's some continuity probs in the running too.
ReplyDeleteFarrell
The first shot is a bit slow and wobbly, you could try to change it, but the idea is good and the last scene is good if you take out the zoom.
ReplyDeleteIsla
Running is maybe a bit slow but you can't change that now. Did she stab him or him her? I cant tell.
ReplyDeleteLiam
Well done, a good start, keep going! I like the flashbacks, maybe make them black and white?
ReplyDeleteTina
I like it too, agree about the flashbacks but everyone does black and white, try something else.
ReplyDeletejake
But were supposed to show we know the conventions and black and white is the convention. The attack bits are def creepy.
ReplyDeleteHarriet
I think its good altho i agree with what people said about the begining.
ReplyDeleteBilly